Mark, I must be blind, where this email poster link??
Ecto, you still available?
See that row of icons up there ???? ? One is user profile, another is 'email poster'.
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At the very end he discovers a body in the basement and it's his.
I kind of see the idea with the 'live' person being the ghost, but I think it's probably been done too many times lately: 'Sixth Sense' and, as you say, 'The Others' both did it (and 'The Eye' to a lesser extent).
My point is you leave it vague as to who was actually hit with the knife during the fight. When we see him again with cleaning supplies it will be assumed that he was the survivor. After he follows the blood trail and finds the body at the end we realize she survived and was trying to hide his body.
Add to that a running monologue from the guy about how bad he feels, how nice she was, how he shouldn't have done it. Overreacted. Lost his temper. She probably wasn't sleeping with his roomate Fred. He doesn't know where he picked up that. Fred's a nice guy, known him for years. He wouldn't sleep with her. He's gay isn't he? Drama student, sort of follows doesn't it? What have I done. Then he finds the knife he used, it's a stage knife. Then he finds the girl with the body. She's wearing rubber gloves.
Then, while he's in shock, she calls Fred to come over with the retards chainsaw, we'll dice up the body and bury the chainsaw with the pieces. Then the dead hero realizes Fred's very recognizable knife (Klingon dagger or somethign) is the murder weapon, that the girl will be setting roomate Fred as well.
Does he warn Fred or sit back and enjoy the show?
You could play it as horror, but as said above that's been done. I'd play it as comedy, sort of making light of Ghost, 6th Sense and The Others.
RJSchwarz
San Diego, CA
RJSchwarz
Personally. The TV thing that I am starting to do is a horror based show (see other posts). Well it is more like a string of horror shorts with the same characters. I think the key to a horror short is not to get lost in wording. This is something that happens and if someone doesn't deliver the line right or with passion, your serious work as become a comedy. The first short I ever did was dialogue free. It was based on sounds from the characters and environments. This heightens the senses and makes the viewer lean in to hear. Then bam hit them with the ending. Shock and awe. <---stolen phrase!
Ecto what happened? Where did you go? I told you my idea and I havent heard a word from you since.
I think we've been scammed, rjschwarz, did he ever get back to you after you told him your idea?
Never got back to me but I figure any ideas freely offered in a post are freely offered so I don't expect any response, credit, whatever. Just part of the give and take of a forum.
RJSchwarz
San Diego, CA
RJSchwarz
Ever heard of the word 'busy'? Some of us, believe it or not, do not obsessively linger about on forums all day. I don't appreciate your libellous accusations ChiTown and copyright issues around your idea are null and void seeing as the premise is so hackneyed and derivative anyway. In short, **** you.
Keep it civil, please: we're all trying to help each other here.
I think I met my match! I'm so glad I found this thread. I just finished telling my friend how I'm not much of a writer and I wish someone would just write for me, it's the filming that I love. I saw a little girl with a mexican marionette the other day and it gave me the idea to do a film on a creepy marionette. Any ideas? I know you said you didn't do humour, maybe a little humour? Some of the best shorts of I've seen, are dramas but there's something offbeat about them which can be incredibly humourous.
Jo 🙂
Definitely sounds interesting. Can you email me so we can talk this over some more?
as far as the two person horror story script, you could start with something like this:
Male A blacks out and when he regains consiousness, he has no idea what he has done. So he basically regains consiousness while he's putting the finishing touches on a grave he has just completed filling in the back yard. He has no idea who been killed, he only remembers that he and his wife were arguing just as he blacked out, but has no idea why. He, of course, assumes without a doubt that he's killed his wife. He goes in the house to try and solve this mystery. However, when he goes inside, his wife is not only alive; she is completely unscathed. Also, they aren't even arguing. Which means she either finds it okay that someone is being buried in the back yard, or doesnt know that he's doing this?
I'm sure somebody can elaborate on that and make it scary.
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-Ian
This is a really cool idea! I like the way your toying with the lead's mind, it works really well in horror. Also, kudos on avoiding the focus on the violence, and instead looking at the reprecussions of his act.
I'm working on a short film concept with a friend, when we have a concrete pitch we'll probably post it to be critisized etc! man my spelling is bad today, very sorry about that!
MJG
