I know this is basically changing your whole idea, but I think it'd be a cool twist if the girlfriend was just like all the other scenarios...he's actually talking to himself, pretending he has a girlfriend, but really, he's alone.

On the original script....it doesn't climax? There's no real resolution either, even reading it I was just....unsatified, it felt really unrealistic. I mean, I can envision it being really funny, but the ending doesn't really have the sense of being connected to the rest of the story. I don't have any ideas for you other than my first crazy one. I liked the story overall though, it's just I can't like that end.

My first reaction was: they are brother and sister? Ehhhwww!

That's probably not what you intended but for some reason that popped into my head at the end. No wonder he came up with stories and lies.

So if they live in the same place why would she bother to call? I'm sure that's the point but I don't get it.

RJSchwarz
San Diego, CA