'K, here's the thing. I plan to get into independent filmmaking soon, and I've written a short screenplay (approx. 25 pages, not in the correct format).

I really don't have too much interest in filming this short, I just wanted to get it out of the way, learn from the mistakes, etc. i finished it months ago, so it's just been sitting around since then.

It would be a great help to me if I could get a few opinions on it, as my next script will most likely be of the same ilk (though maybe not). It's kind of a crime/mystery thing, I guess.

If anyone here is willing to read through 25 or so pages and give a little honest feedback, PM me.

Thanks in advance.

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