I just finished a rough draft to Act 1 of my debut martial arts film. Just want to know what you guys think of it
comments, concerns, ect.
http://www.filefactory.com/file/ffa5c9/
you can download it at the above link, its a PDF file to open it with your apropriate program.
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???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
Firt problem i spotted with it, you say George is a freelance yet he refers to his 'handler'
Besides that there were no real problems although i find the movie a bit too ripped off kill bill, unless this was your plan?
well it sorta was, ACT I is supposed to be like Kill BiLL, ACT II is supposed to be like a Noir Film, ACT III is well...just supposed to focus on closure.
hrmm...i refered to "His" handler? must be a type-O, or a reference to Madison's Handler.
The basic idea of the thing, its a world where guns were never invented, everyone uses swords. I suppose its similiar to Kill Bill in that regard. I mean, its supposed to be similiar, the first act more so than anything else.
???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
yea yea, i see where it is, handler should be changed to client
???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
What made it ripped off kill bill for me was more the references to westerns etc.
hrmmm... dun kno what to say
???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
???I'm not, you know, Ronald McDonald opening up this Kmart or something, ... Rather than asking me for my autograph, you're actually watching a movie with me. If you want to sit there and talk about how to get into the business and ask me questions about 'Pulp Fiction' I'm not going to be very responsive. I'll probably shut you down. All right? But if you want to talk to me about the movie we just showed and what you thought about it, I'll talk to you all (expletive) night.???
