NOVEMBER 26th 1916 AGEAN SEA
CUT TO EXT AGEAN SEA DAY
we pan over the Tropical waters of the Aegean sea We see a ship this is the HMHS Britannic
sister ship to the titanic painted in hospital ship colors then We see A stream of water erupt from her side a column of Fire And we HEAR WOOD Crunching METAL , and CRACKING WOOD the Britannic starts to list to starboard
CUT TO EXT DECK
we see smoke and People Running We HEAR Screaming KLAXON Horns blaring
INT BRITANNIC DAY
We see People crowding the Grand Staircase we FOCUS on a young ensign He is almost pulled back by the Mob of People
CUT TO:
We see an ragged looking man with a revolver rushing through the Crowd he makes his way to the ensign this is Jason Johnson (early thirties
CUT TO
the Britannic sinks lower by the head
CUT TO INT
We see the man grab the Ensign and put the gun to hi head
JOHNSON
take me to D deck or I?ll shoot you
The ensign pulls the man through the Crowd
The man leads him down corridors and down hatches Until we see he Sign saying D Deck the man crawls into the cargo hold the ensign follows him to a vault the ensign eyes him
JOHNSON
Whit by?Whit by? The secret lies with Whit by
the sailor watches the man seal himself in a vault we hear him still ranting
JOHNSON
Whit by the secret lies with Whit by
???..(holow echoing sound Like a sewer pipe)
CUT TO EXT
the stern begins to rise as the list to starboard becomes more severe
CUT TO
the Ensign looks over the Railing And Jumps into the ocean
CUT TO
he is floating in the water watching the Britannic go down
He Sees the Flagstaff go under he swims to it and rips the pennant off
as he bubbles Fill the screen
CUT TO
EXT UNDERWATER DAY
The Britannic rest underwater while the title RAISE THE BRITANNIC rolls up in BOLD
EXT ISLAND OF NOVAYA ZEMLYA DAY SOUTH OF BEDNAYA MOUNTAIN
We SUPER IMPOSE island of Novaya Zemlya JULY 2004
then we SUPER IMPOSE Part 1 The Zeus project
We do several flyovers of the Island,
We see a girl dressed in a winter outfit trudging through the snow this is Haley morgan,15, Works for the national underwater and marine agency. She trudges through the snow and Begins to Dig with a spade .
EXT WASHINTON DC: DAY
A man in a trench coat (late 40?s) walks with a younger girl (late teens) by the front fence of the white house , the older man is Admiral Johnson retired admiral of the US Navy and NUMA , And the Girl is Anna Routousky
Of the national underwater marine agency
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I know you don?t like it
But the president wont be happy when he hears this
ANNA
He?s just worrying that those scientists
Are going to leak the information to the public
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
He thinks that but we know better
We both work with those people
And their trustworthy
ANNA
Maybe If I can convince him to see our side of the story
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
Our side? .. We practically sent A civilian to A
Island no one has even heard of and we haven?t even heard
From her in two days
ANNA
I?ll win him over to our side of the story
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
We?ll see?
We focus on the admirals face as Anna Walks into the Whitehouse gate (he?s worried
INT OVAL OFFICE
The president swiveled around in his chair with is hands behind his head looking out of the window
The presidential Aide ENTERS THE ROOM
AIDE
?Admiral Johnson and Anna Routousky are here to see you
PRESIDENT
Send them in
The President turns around in the chair as they both ENTER the room and sit down
ANNA
Mister president, we have a reason to believe that there are rare minerals located on the Russian Island of Novaya zemlya we have a reason to believe that it may ?.
The president Interrupts
PRESIDENT
Damn it why does everything we
Find is near there you know the political situation since
Vladimir Putin was kidnapped don?t you Its like the red revolution is happening again !!!
ANNA
Anyways we sent a member of our agency to the Island to investigate an old mine and we haven?t heard from her in two days
PRESIDENT
What you haven?t heard from her
Well hell she might be shot dead by now
What the hell were you guys looking for anyway
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
Synthium
PRESIDENT
What the Hell is Synthium
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
It?s an ore more radioactive than uranium and plutonium
The radiation is so extreme that the mineral has long vanished from the continents and there isn?t very much left
PRESIDENT
That pisses my off even more
Now were looking for an ore no ones ever even heard of
And you come in telling me you lost a team member, your looking for an ore, and I bet you next your going to tell me its on the titanic!
ANNA
Look mister president the Zeus Project is too far
Into reality to quit now we cant forget about it
The President turns around back to the window .
NOVAYA ZEMLYA DAY:
Haley Morgan lays on the ground blood oozing from the bullet scrape on her leg she staggers upward
After dragging herself on the snow. A Russian guard Is holding an AK-47 Haley Runs wincing Painfully
The Sentry FIRES HIS WEAPON and Haley is thrown to the ground by the Force of the bullet
She drags across the snow as the man tries to get a fix on her we HEAR A SEMI AUTOMATIC PISTOL
go off and the man is thrown to the ground .
CUT TO
We see a Pretty Girl Holding a Gun Wearing a Brown Coat This is Jessica ride (late teens) also works for the national underwater marine agency , Jessica Pulls the girl up and begins to take her on a sled ..
CUT TO NAVAL CYCLONIC RESEARCH CENTRE DAY
The room is filled with equipment and some smart looking men these are , Doctor George Kennedy
Who is in his thirties, admiral Clancy who is in his fifties, and Admiral Johnson , Along with CIA
Agent Andy Birkowitz, who is in his late teens .
There is a map with LEDS Glowing around the united states in the room, Doctor Kennedy points to it and begins lecturing the men about the Zeus Project.
KENNEDY
What you see here can revolutionize
The way we fight wars, gentlemen
This is the Zeus project, Each one of these lights
Is a laser beam ,a beam powerful enough to destroy any long range
Nuclear missile miles before it reaches its designated target.
ANDY
Is this project theory or does it really work
Doctor?
KENNEDY
It works, but all we need is a power source, A
Strong nuclear power source that , we?ve found
In a little known ore called Synthium which is several times more powerful than radium
CLANCY
So you see it works
ANDY
I have an announcement to make.
Everyone in the room goes Quiet ,
ANDY
We?ve got the girl we sent to Novaya zemlya
Onboard A research ship receiving care for two gunshot wounds
, the special projects director for NUMA Killed a Russian guard who tried to kill her
KENNEDY
Who is the special projects director for NUMA?
ANDY
Jessica ride me and Her are pretty familiar with each other
KENNEDY
How familiar
ANDY
I cant tell you
but what I can tell you Is that The Iraqi?s
are suspected to Have Weapons of Mass Destruction
which are suspect to be nuclear warheads of at least sixty megatons
KENNEDY
we wont have to worry any longer
since we?re making such warfare obsolete.
ANDY
a way to win a war in which you cant
win ,A nuclear war a war in which civilians are
no different than combatants
Kennedy focuses on Andy as Andy gives him a serious Look< a look that could stop a brave man in his tracks
EXT WASHINGTON AIRPORT DAY:
An ambulance and Limo taxi down the runway at the airport , We see Jessica Ride directing A
Learjet towards her. She backs off as the plane comes to a halt. Kennedy and Admiral Johnson exit the car
We see two EMTS walk past the camera
CUT TO
Jessica stands beside the jet as the two EMTS Load Haley off the plane Behind Her
CUT TO
Admiral Johnson and Kennedy are next to each other talking
KENNEDY
Is That her
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
Yes
KENNEDY
Can you tell Her to hold up a minute
With the EMT?s so I can talk to her
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
You can ask but there?s a chance she?ll say no
Kennedy Approaches Jessica ,she stares At Kennedy as he approaches her
KENNEDY
I?m doctor Kennedy, you may have heard about me
in your involvement with the Zeus project
JESSICA
don?t tell me you want to talk to her
KENNEDY
I do want to talk to her
Jessica shakes her head at Kennedy?s notion
JESSICA
I cant let anyone see her, she needs to get to a hospital
she needs, medical attention.
KENNEDY
she can still talk cant she?
JESSICA
she?s got a hole in her the size of a golf ball
your going to have to wait.
KENNEDY Walks away seeing that his advancements are getting nowhere
EXT AMERICAN IRAQI EMBASSY WASHINGTON DC. NIGHT:
We Focus on the stone exterior of the building , there are two American Cops standing outside
we HEAR cop jargon coming from their radio?s
INT:
Two Arab Men come walking out of an office into a Luxuriously decorated room we MOVE with them when as they walk , one has a file folder under his arm this is Michael Hussein approaching forty one, the other one young and close cut, stubble of a beard.
HEUSEIN
(opening the folder)
What?s this ship?, is it American?
KORESH
yes it?s an American research ship
trying to pose as a whaler.
HEUSEIN
what is this funny shape
KORESH
it?s a helicopter it was captured by our satellite landing on the island for a short time and then leaving, there were also three people , two are now gone and one appears to have not moved since .
HEUSEIN
that means he?s dead
KORESH
The Americans are interested in using laser technology to
build some kind of defense system we don?t know what they are to be used for or what it has to do with this Island
HEUSEIN
what makes you think that this was
connected
KORESH
I?m pretty sure that these events are connected somehow.
INT EMMERSON ELECTRONICS BUILDING DR EORGE EMMERSON?S Office DAY
we see a man facing a window in a spacious luxurious office this is Dr. George Emerson late Fifties
We See the Phone Ring He picks it up we only Hear him talk we only hear mumbled speech from the phone
EMMERON-FROM THE BACK : CU
EMMERSON (broken speech)
yes?.
she is nearly completely
trained???.
Yes the results are perfect
????.I can assure you
Mr. Hussein she?ll be ready
when you need her
We hear a disconnected signal sound we pan to the desk and we pan over the desktop, we see the back of
a watch a gold watch we see a small Iraqi flag Lithographed to the Back Plate We use MUSIC to the effect
we pan to men standing at the door in Jumpsuits holding AK-47?s with the Logo EMERSON INDUSTRIES
embroidered on them
FADE TO BLACK
CUT TO INT WASHINGTON MEAUSEAM OF ART AND SCIENCE DAY
We see there are Party decorations we see men in white shirts and Black ties Offering samples of Fruit to the Guests of the party we see Jessica standing wearing a beautiful dress staring at a cute gill who is talking to Haley Morgan this is Danica (also late teens)
CU DANICA AND HALEY
HALEY
you still like her
DANICA
yeah
HALEY
Anna?s going to Murder you
if she finds out
DANICA
she never will
Danica Walks away from Haley We focus on the appalled look on Haley?s face
CUT TO
Admiral Johnson moves over to Jessica
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
your supposed to be doing the Presentation in five Minutes
I want
JESSICA
I want to talk about the Synthuim I know where it is
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I don?t want to hear that stupid Britannic Story
every time we mention the Zeus project
you bring it up and that stupid Britannic model
shows up on your desk and that mess all over your office
those Clive Cussler Novels, That Stupid Movie, those
documentaries, that stupid flag this has to stop as of today
JESSICA
but The mine we found on Novaya zemlya contained the body of a sergeant named Jake Rode? there was mining equipment from Colorado, and there was an old news paper
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
so what that doesn?t prove anything but the fact that
someone mined out all the byridium and took it somewhere
it has nothing to do with the Britannic, get it off your Mind
or at least find yourself a Male date this thing with you dating
women is annoying I know your not gay You dated
several guys before you met Anna and before your
little thing with one of your boyfriends
JESSICA
Keep my personal life out of this
And I?ll do your Presentation
and follow the script this time
CUT TO
we see Jessica Making her way to the Podium she stands at the Podium and begins speaking into the MIC
JESSICA
May I have your Attention please
the crowd goes silent and they focus on her
JESSICA
The national underwater and Marine agency has been
operating for twenty six years under the direction of
Clive Cussler who is also a novelist renowned for
his great Adventure and nonfiction Books
I Have to say to Doctor Cussler that he
has discovered some of the greatest
treasures through his underwater adventures
I dedicate this Exhibit to him I present you
with the Lost treasure of the lost
civil war steamship the SS. General Grant
we see people unveil the TREASURE People CLAP and cheer as Jessica leaves the podium
CUT TO Jessica and DANICA are talking
JESSICA
are you still coming over today
DANICA
sure always do when you ask me to
JESSICA
Do you know that Anna
and me are too close for you to mess this up
DANICA
I know because I am also in love with
you
JESSICA
I hope you don?t slip up
DANICA
I never slip up I get my Man or woman and I keep them
no matter what unlike you who will dump me because
I don?t perform as good as I used to Anna Must still be good
to you
Jessica kisses Danica A HANDSOME And thin Business man With glasses and perfect hair
taps Jessica on the shoulder Jessica Turns round this man is Doctor Rolland Emerson (late 30?s of Emerson
electronics Jessica shakes his Hand
EMERSON
Hello I?m doctor Emerson of Emerson electronics
corporation and you must be Jessica I heard a lot about you
lately ,your discovery?s and your looks take my breath away
I?m very interested in you My father George Emerson
is a big admirer of your work
JESSICA
Thanks and I Marvel at yours
Your always finding a way to
advance our electronics
soon our servers will be the size of a Normal computer
EMERSON
I?m working on that as we speak
And I would like to know If you?ll be My
date for dinner tonight
JESSICA
sorry but I?m not interested
Emerson walks away and mingles with the rest of the crowd
DANICA
He was Cute
JESSICA
oh please I don?t date Millionaires
DANICA
I would if I Were eighteen like you
you don?t have any sense Jessica, Anna
doesn?t have a you know and she doesn?t have a
big bank account either and she?s not all that pretty either
unlike me
JESSICA
shut up ok As much as I love you
you?re a little too Smart acting
you think your better than her don?t you
DANICA
no but I know that more guys fall all over me
JESSICA
but all the guys that fall on Anna Always love her
and aren?t looking for a quick thrill unlike you
DANICA
you know nothing about how I get my men
so shut up
Jessica Pours the punch in her cup into Danica ?s cup
DANICA
what did you do that for you better drink it
DANICA
you better be glad I didn?t pour it in your dress
Jessica walks away Danica looks at Jessica as she walks away we see that she?s mad
INT JESSICA?S HOUSE DAY:
Jessica vacuums down a coke in the living room as Danica begins walking around
putting on make-up , This is Danica ,One of Jessica?s friends ,she stops in front of the couch
DANICA
Damn Damn Double Damn, I?ve got another pimple
JESSICA
since when is a pimple a sign of leprosy Danica?
Danica stares at Jessica as she starts walking again Jessica gets up and follows her Danica kisses Jessica on the cheek
DANICA
it?s not that its that you never have this problem
JESSICA
don?t you think I have to worry about pimples and
blackheads, I used to get them all the time.
DANICA
well you don?t really care your skin isn?t cracking like porcelain
JESSICA
your seventeen and your going on the next Mrs. America list
DANICA
I better leave before Anna Gets Here she?ll think your cheating on her .
JESSICA
I am cheating on her.
EXT: JESSICA?S HOUSE , FISHING PIER DAY
Jessica and Anna Walk down the Fishing pier together Laughing and Giggling
CUT TO
Anna And Jessica sit on the fishing pier
JESSICA
too bad we don?t fish
ANNA
I?ll pass on that one I don?t like
putting the worm in the hook
JESSICA
its simple really
all you do is stick it in
(Anna looks at Jessica like she?s strange)
ANNA
do what!!?? what did you say?!!
JESSICA
all you do is stick the worm in the hook
ANNA
ok at first I thought you were referring to something less
appetizing
JESSICA
like what
ANNA
I can?t tell
We HEAR the sound of a helicopter flying in the DISTANCE It Gets closer
we get a long-shot of the pier As the helicopter Hovers over
CUT TO : THEIR POV-
The Bottom of the Helicopter is above their heads the chopper backs off as a man hangs a megaphone out of the side this is Jake Hopper (late 30?s)
HOPPER
Jessica? are you Jessica Ride?
Jessica waves at him to confirm that she is who he needs.
HOPPER
I?m supposed to fly you into Washington Admiral Clancy?s orders
JESSICA
who the hell is Admiral Clancy?
HOPPER
you?ll find out when you get there
ANNA
who is that
JESSICA
I?ll tell you later
ANNA
did you tell him to be here
JESSICA
of course I always keep things from you to get you off-guard
Jessica gets up and runs down the dock as the helicopter heads in that direction she enters the House as the Helicopter passes the house Anna follows soon after Jessica comes out of the house holding a file folder as
Anna stops at the porch
EXT NATIONAL ARCHIVES DAY WASHINGTON DC.
INT NATIONAL ARCHIVES DAY:
Jessica walks down a huge row of enormous shelves busting with ,BOXES and FILES Dating from the beginning of the United states and Before.
Jessica Sees what she?s looking for she Pulls out a Folder Labeled Johnson, Jason
she begins reading though the Files as Admiral Clancy rears up behind Her
ADMIRAL CLANCY
Excuse me?..
Jessica turns around to see admiral Clancy
JESSICA
Who are you?
ADMIRAL CLANCY
I?m admiral James Clancy
I was sent by admiral Johnson to see if you need any help
JESSICA
It?s a pleasure to meet you sir but I obviously don?t need any help
ADMIRAL CLANCY
Are you sure
JESSICA
I?m sure I don?t need your help
nor do I need anyone else?s help
So you better get it out of your head
that because I?m a girl I cant figure out things for myself.
Admiral Clancy takes a look at his watch
ADMIRAL CLANCY
I just thought
JESSICA
you thought wrong
Jessica storms out of the room
EXT ADMIRAL JOHNSON?S BACKYARD GARDEN DAY
we start to rise over a row of shrubs
JESSICA (V.O)
Johnson, Jason Johnson,
A renaissance man, He was a Miner
, engineer, an artist, a craftsman, musician
and he was crazy, he was also a genius ..
KENNEDY (V.O)
what does this have to do with the Zeus Project?
JESSICA (V.O)
It?s all connected to him
KENNEDY (V.O)
How
JESSICA (V.O)
Wait a minute
CUT TO
JESSICA, KENNEDY, ADMIRAL JOHNSON and ANNA Are standing in the economicly decorated garden
JESSICA
I?ll get to the Point, Jason Johnson and his men found the Mine
back in 1906, they launched their expedition from the Forsyth mining
company the same year, came across what they were looking for
and they maybe took about five or six tons of the stuff , even back then they thought that it had military capabilitys.
KENNEDY
How does this Sergeant Jake Rode Fit into all this
JESSICA
he was one of Jason Johnson?s Miners
KENNEDY
what happened to Johnson
JESSICA
He was caught by the French he was chased all the way to the English channel
and he fought a running gun battle with another cruiser all the way from Aberdeen to Southampton , and several years later he had the mineral loaded onto a ship and in November 1916 the ship sailed , and never came back and was reported to have sank in the Mediterranean ten miles from the spot she actually sank. , You see he started his jorney on the Hospital ship Britannic
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
so we know its in one place but how do you
think your going to get the aproval of the government
to Finance this operation
EXT CABIN CRUISER POTOMAC RIVER
INT CABIN CRUISER
We see a group of men sitting Down in the stern seat of the vessel these are HOPPER , CIA AGENT ANDY BIRKOWITZ,ADMIRAL CLANCY,SENATOR CHAMBERLAND (late 50,s), BAKER, (late 30?s) THE PRESIDENT, JOHN GUNN (mid 30?s)
Jessica and adiral Johnson sip coffee
PRESIDENT
Are you sure your sources are correct
miss ride
JESSICA
yes , the records clearly show that the byridum ended up being shipped on
the Britannic, I know its gointg to cost a ton of money to salvage the byridium
but it wont break our National defense budget
PRESIDENT
It wont break our budget because the Country is broke
we have no budget we?re on the brink of war and your talking about asking for money to build an oversized laser tag game
JESSICA
its more than a game Mister president
That remark was entirely childish,
theres no way I swould spend money on something
I knew didn?t work I demand you give me permission to go along with this
SENATOR CHAIMBERLAND
look your talking to the president you cant argue with him
JESSICA
He?s a man isn?t? he I know That this project
is a ball breaker but we can do this it?s a matter
of if we have the will to do it
Doctor kennedy rises
KENNEDY
we can make nuclear warfare
almost obsolete with this project sir you cant just shove it down a drain and expect it to fit This Operation will change the entire history of the united states as a peaceful nation this is the greatest defense
system none to man
Admiral clancy leaves the room and begins talking on a phone Jessica looks at him through the Window
Jessica Leaves the room to talk to clancy we see them talking but we cant hear them through the door
EXT CABIN CRUISER MARINA NIGHT
Andy birkowitz searches the marina after everyone but anna and Jessica leaves
Anna turns around and sees him she nods in his direction as Jessica walks off
andy approaches Her and he begins talking to her
ANNA
why didn?t you say anything
ANDY
I had nothing to say
and you weren?t there
were you I didn?t see you
ANNA
I was in the wheelhouse watching television but
I saw some of you talking , and the president didn?t seem to be happy at all
ANDY
He wasn?t for some reason
ANNA
the man didn?t even listen to your thing about offensive weapons
ANDY
The main thing wasn?t the offensive weapons we were talking about
defensive weapons he?s afraid to spend money on something that is so new no one ever thought we could build an invisible laser defense system of this magnitude its as simple as that Me Being a CIA agent I
would be happy to let her do it
ANNA
he wont change his mind
will he?
ANDY
He will Presidents never know what they want
until we need it the most and now we need it
ANNA
will you do something for me
ANDY
sure as long as its within the law
ANNA
would you see if Jessica is cheating on me with this girl
named danica
ANDY
I wont do it Anna But if you go out to dinner with me tonight I
may arrange something But I doubt she is
ANNA
I wouldn?t go out with you
I know what you and Jessica did a while back
and I want wo wait till I?m older
ANDY
Me and Jessica dated and It went farther than that
but that was a long time ago Anna and you need
a male confidant you don?t need her anymore
ANNA
I don?t like you and you cant make me love you
or sleep with you in that context
so I am going to leave and your going to standing here like a retard
EXT NUMA HEADQUARTERS DAY
Jessica gets out of her car and begins to Enter the Building
INT NUMA HEADQUARTERS JESSIA?S OFFICE DAY:
INT JESSICA?S office We See Newspaper clippings on the wall ,Pictures of her and Anna together
Jessica as a child , DVD?s Pictures from her cameo in Law and Order ,A VHS of Raise the titanic
Clive Cussler novels on a shelf Nautical Artifacts we pan over to her desk and there is a model of
A famous ship and a name plate on her desk we Hear a click and we pan to the door the door opens Jessica Comes in and snatches A paper off her Desk She sits down And goes through her drawer
and finds what she?s looking for A pack of instant coffee she runs out of the office and shuts the door
INT HALLWAY:
Jessica is holding a steaming cup of coffee as she gets closer to the entrance of admiral Johnson?s office.
INT NUMA HEADQUARTERS ADMIRAL JOHNSON?S OFFICE DAY
Jessica stands at the window while doctor Kennedy sits down in the chair at the admirals desk
smoking a cigar
JESSICA
the admirals going to kill you if he catches you in his chair
KENNEDY
even worse when he sees
I ?m smoking one of his cigars
JESSICA
anyways, I wonder how long will it
will take him to say no it never takes long to
say no.
KENNDY
and it never takes long to say yes either
Jessica sees The admiral getting out of a black car across the street
JESSICA
here he comes George
you better snuff it out
Kennedy Hurriedly snuffs out the Cuban Cigar.
INT HALLWAY
Admiral Johnson walks stoically among the people greeting Him he only nods in acknowledgement as he opens the door and ENTERS the Office We ENTER With him
WE pocus on the admiral as he saws nothing for a brief moment a tense moment
Jessica stares at him worriedly
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
were in business
Kennedy smiles along with Jessica the admiral Chuckles
EXT CAPITOL STREET DAY
We Focus on Jessica as she walks down the sidewalk , she stands on the corner waiting for the traffic to die away
CUT TO
Andy stands leaning against a Building He sees her he walks to her as she steps into traffic
ANDY
HEY!!! HEY!! JESSICA
Jessica turns around to see him we see that she is happy to see him
JESSICA
hi
ANDY
sorry I didn?t talk to you
during the meeting
JESSICA
It?s ok It isn?t like
He didn?t change his mind
ANDY
you mean he approved it
JESSICA
He did now, I?m
sidetracking the mission
to the Atlantic to look for byridium deposits
ANDY
Getting off our subject
How are they treating you in there
JESSICA
great in fact my paycheck
will be increased if this project is a success
ANDY
I think I?ll see you I have to talk to the president in an hour
I?ll see you later
JESSICA
bye
Andy watches Jessica walk across the street We FOCUS on him as he smiles and turns away.
EXT UNDERWRATER DAY:
We super impose this onto the screen: PHASE TWO THE BLACK ABYSS NORTH ATLANTIC OCEAN 110 MILES FROM ICELAND
We see nothing but water and sand and darkness, suddenly an angel white Torpedo-shaped submersible comes drifing INTO view this is NUMA?s oldest Sub the DEEP QUEST Its LIGHTS SHINE through the Falling Plankton and the endless Blackness
INT DEEP QUEST
Anna routousky stared though the Tiny veiwport there is sweat on her forehead And Her shirt is a Batered
Tube top that has seen better days her shorts are extremely short gym shorts that are frawed at the leg she turns her head so that she will not fog up the veiwport , we HEAR a soft male voice calling this is
Albert baker,
BAKER
check to see if the gieger counter is on
Anna?s hands slide over to a row of knobs and swithces she feels them and finally begins switching them one
by one she pulls her tube top up as she turns towards baker we see another man sitting at the controls
this is Ben wilding (late 20?s ) He is in charge of the subs electrical system
WILDING
want a cup of sediment
Wilding holds a cup of cofee out to her
ANNA
you should have asked me five minutes ago
after my face almost froze to the plexiglass
WILDING
you were trying to kiss the glass
again weren?t you ?
ANNA
no
WILDING
don?t lie you were getting honery for your girlfriend weren?t you
ANNA
shut up
WILDING
the radiation detector hasn?t picked up any byridum concentrations yet
ANNA
of course not , Jessica was hardheaded she thought she could
find some here to avoid raising the Britannic f it wasn?t necessary
WILDING
the bottom is as flat as you are
ANNA
shut up Wilding
WILDING
I ment your stomach
ANNA
I?m under eighteen wilding
I could send the underwater police to come and get you
BAKER
and we?ll get cool and the gang while were at it
Anna gulps the steaming coffee up in a single gulp
ANNA
there is no byridium here
Jessica just wanted to avoid raising the Britannic
she thinks hat this will end up being like that
old movie starring Richard Jordan and David Selby
where they rose the Titanic and the Byzantium
wasn?t even there I?d rather eat the sediment than
to sit here all day freezing half to death
EXT SALVAGE FLEET DAY - HELECOPTER SHOT
We pan over a small fleet of gray navy salvage ships we FOCUS on one and we Travel wowards it
INT SALVAGE SHIP USS. BAINBRIDGE
We see Men Repairing Equipment,guys fumbling with light towers
INT USS BAINBRIDGE CAPTAINS OFFICE
Jessica stands in front of a porthole her arms are folded her back is toward a desk there is a man sitting down this is Captain Bart Mancuso (late fourties) holding a group of papers
MANCUSO
did you know that there was no byridium
where we were looking
JESSICA
uuuhhh
MANCUSO
answer the question , my men have been here for two weeks and havent detected a damn thing if you don?t tell me what you want I will move the operation to where it sapposed to take place
JESSICA
I wanted to avoid that I thought we could find it
MANCUSO
I?m going to move this operation
Before the Hurricane season kicks in
its too cold down twelve thousand feet
to keep men stuffed in submersibles
that could be doing something useful
JESSICA
lets just get the men back to the ship and move the operation
?
MANCUSO
good . I?m putting hopper as the operator of the photographic equipment on the
deep Quest because he?s the best underwater Instrument component man in the entire National underwater marine agency
JESSICA
Ok I?ll move the ships
seince I got the same order from Admiral Johnson this Morning
EXT BAGHDAD NIGHT
We see a Dull olive drab military chopper flying over the sand dunes the chopper lands on the ground
we SEE US ARMY Soldiers crawl out of the chopper They crawl DOWN a Hill with their guns held in front of them they storm across the desert floor to a shoddy looking house and
INT HOUSE
A bunch of terrorists holding weapons are gathered around an unconscious Blondeheaded girl
this is Michelle Sharif (late teens) captured by Iraqi insurgents a few months before ,and held for ransom.
The soldiers Bust in With AK-47?s And the Men drag the girl away behind a stack of crates
One of the Terrorists starts to shooting and causes a voley of gunfire the terrorist drop like flies as the
bullets hit them they hide behind things as the BULLETS, RICOCHET off of meatal objects
the terrorist are finnaly killed by the soldiers they move in on the girl the frames become jittery
they cover the girls face we Use MUSIC to the effect
FADE TO BLACK
we fade to
CUT TI INT NEWS STUDIO
We see a Slim Older News caster sitting ad a desk with the words CNN on the Front
NEWS CASTER
Today In Iraq The US Military Rescued Michelle sharif
the half Arab daughter of the Shell Oil tycoon Omar Sharif
who was captured by the Al- Queda Terror network
three weeks Ago In Baghdad., This Is tom Brokaw
With CNN News, Washington?..
INT IRAQI EMBASSY NIGHT
We see Heusein talking with a Man This is defense Minister Tariq Saddat (early 50?s)
HEUSEIN
the Americans are building a defence system code named the Zeus Project
it is a mid air nuclear weopon interception device powered by an invisible laser beam of unknown streingth
SADDAT
Its feasible but such a powerful device would need a strong power source
, and you say that this lies in the hold of the Britannic
HEUSEIN
It is in the hold of the Britannic all of our military documents
say this
SADDAT
what about the American girl
the Americans rescued from our soldiers
has the doctor programmed her properly
HEUSEIN
yes she has been programmed correctly Dr George. Emerson will be making
his way to the Airport to intercept her and breif her on her mission.
SADDAT
what do we do with the Bodies?
HEUSEIN
alert their families and send our condolences
Doctor George Emerson Comes In . he looks at Saddat and speaks
EMERSON
Gentlemen She?s
in perfect condition she?s responding to
the treatments and drugs as planned
INT WASHINGTON AIRPORT DAY
We see Michelle walking through the expansive lobby holdiing a carry-on bag
she walks by a payphone the payphone rings she picks it up and listens for a while and she hangs it back onto the receiver and begins walking acroos the Lobby to the MENS restroom and walks in
INT BATHROOM
Michelle walks down till she reaches the last stall and opens it we see a man in his late 50?s this is Doctor George Emerson an american scientist Working secretly with the Iraqi government to modify human behavior
The doctor signals her to sit and she sits on the toilet He opens up his doctor s bag and he pulls out a Tube
this it a flashlight he shines the light into ther eye and then he pulls out a needle and begins to inject a drug into her arm
EMERSON
The objective of your Mission is to
retreive confedentail documents, and schematics
from the computers using a compact storage
device and personal notebook which I Have provided you
now pick up the case on the floor.
Michelle picks p case on the floor and slips it into her handbag
FADE TO BLACK
INT LOBBY WASHINGTON AIRPORT DAY
Michelle walks out of the lobby of the airport building and onto the outsice and begins walking
EXT NUMA HEADQUARTERS
We see the NUMA Building
I
NT NUMA HEADQHARTERS _BOARDROOM -DAY
Jessica sits waiting in the boardroom Anna walks behind her and lays a folder in front of her
JESSICA
what?s this
ANNA
your autorization
JESSICA
authorization for what
ANNA
to sign Michelle sharif onto the agency employee list
JESSICA
what the girl who was kidnapped in Iraq the
daughter of Oil Billionaire Omar sharif , the same girl
that Andy tried to rescue but he was wounded in the gunfight
ANNA
I said??..
JESSICA
I know what you said but do you think that this is a good Idea
I mean couldn?t she have been corrupted by the terrorists to took her hostage , what if the whole terrorist thing was a setup I mean she
would make a great agent she?s half arab and she doesn?t look like it so
she?d blend right on in with everybody else with no suspicion
ANNA
maybe she?s not a spy maybe
I can get to know hwe and then We?ll Find out
Anna leaves the Boardroom
INT: Caffeteria Day
Michelle sits down by Herself in the NUMA Caffeeria Andy birkrowitz is in line at the counter He is paying
for his food Jessica taps andy on the shoulder
ANDY
Hi Jessica
JESSICA
Could you keep tabs on someone for me
ANDY
maybe But anna asked me to do the same thing to you
she thinks your cheating on her with a girl named Danica
are you cheating on her
JESSICA
why
ANDY
just answer me Are you
I wont tell her
JESSICA
yes I am cheating on her
ANDY
ok now lets go talk to our new friend over there
JESSICA
Do you like anna?
ANDY
why
JESSICA
she told me you harassed her
trying to coerce her into a date
ANDY
I did ask her out
but I failed
JESSICA
wait until she?s about eighteen and she?ll accept it
Andy and Jessica sit down with Michelle
MICHELLE
hi
JESSICA
hi
MICHELLE
what is it usually like around here
JESSICA
Its Pretty cool being here
? as many things we find on our expeditions
Andy begins wolfing don his sandwich
MICHELLE
does he normally eat like that?
JESSICA
no that?s only when he needs to be somewhere
in a certain amount of time
ANDY
you wouldn?t mind having the last bit of my sandwich would you
JESSICA
I?ll take it
Jessica Eats the last bit of his sandwich as he begins to leave
MICHELLE
where is he going
JESSICA
to his other job ..
CUT TO EXT NUMA SHIP DAY -AGEAN SEA
We pan over a white research ship this is he Benthetic Adventurer
EXT REASEARCH SHIP DECK DAY:
We see various crewmen working on various pieces of Eqipment we hear HEAVY MEATAL music bein played softly through loudspeakers as the workers do their jobs , Michelle steps out onto the deck to see what is going on
Wilding comes cown from one of the rigs asnd talks to her
WILDING
I see you finally came down to see what we do here on the poop deck , is it anything like you Imagined
We HEAR Jake Hopper calling from somewhere we pan up to a submerisible bing lifted by a crane
this sub is the Experimental submersible deep adventurer 1
HOPPER
come up here and help me fix the Manipulator
on this thing theres seawater in the electronics
Wilding looks back at michelle
MICHELLE
I guess I caught you at a bad moment
WILDING
I?m sorry
A man in sunglasses puts his arm around michelle and takes her in the corner and talks to her
tis is none other than baker he?s an freelancer for the Iraqi government.
BAKER
you downloaded anything yet
MICHELLE
no not yet
BAKER
when we get back on shore you know what to do
download the scemactics and don?t get caught
MICHELLE
what?s your assignment ?
BAKER
cripple the operation
MICHELLE
how
BAKER
I cant tell you
but you?ll know when you hear of it
Baker walks away and he goes into the manin part of the ship he shuts the door partially behind him
Michelle walks back onto the deck she see?s anna snding on a platform above the sea
looking at the greek shoreline
MICHELLE
nice view
anna looks DOWN at michelle
ANNA
I know
MICHELLE
you look nice
ANNA
You think I look nice I?ve been underneath a submersible for half an hour and I?ve been talking to men covered in grease and you think I look nice
MICHELLE
sure I do , you look great all the time
ANNA
ok if you really think so I guess I look good
We pan over the deck as Admiral Johnson walks out onto the deck like a millionare sporting sunglasses and a cigar and a panama hat
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
Wilding ! Wilding
Wilding turns away from the submersible
WILDING
sir
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
when will that sub be ready to join in with the deep quest?
WILDING
we?re almost done we should be ready in about twenty Minutes
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
Okay
EXT UNDERWATER DAY
the water is A beautiful cruelean the Deep quest , danced slowly wtith the current with the wreckage of the sunken Britannic Underneath it
INT Deep quest
HOPPER
life support timer is on
WILDING
good we?ll have about seven hours of air downb here
Jessica turns away from the view ports
JESSICA
hopefully we wont be down here that long
WILDING
we wont
we?re just surveying the damage to the hull so we can be able to weld the plates on when they are cut to size
EXT Deep adventurer
The sub shines its light on the Impact crack on the side of the Britannic?s hull we see the sub make several passes at the damage
INT SUB
JESSICA
looks like were going to have to work to patch up the old girl
WILDING
not as much as it will take to path you up when you get picked up by those damn Iraqi?s
HOPPER
shut up jim no Iraqi?s gonna get to close to me
I?ll put a foot in their ass
JESSICA
amen brother
EXT salvage ships day
we pan over the salvage ships we focus on one ship in particular this is the USS Bainbridge
INT USS Bainbridge Submersible hangar Day
We see massive gray steel plates being suspended on a pully system over a pit them plates are lowered into the water one by one
the crew check to see if the plates are handled properly as they are dipped into the ocean they are realeased when half of their surface is underwater
CUT TO
We see a helicopter beginning to fly over the salvage ships
we see there is another ship as the chipper fly?s over this is the Iraqi cruiser the Al-Tirkrit
Underwater The plates fall like like paper around the wreck of the Britannic as the sub s arrive to pick threm up the subs begin to get in position and begin lifting the plates we SEE them beginning to weld the plates to the Hull
EXT: DEEP ADVENTURER
the deep adventurer slides INTO view the submersible is sleek and resembles a small Russian Alfa class
attack submarine with its gleaming yellow paint
INT DEEP ADVENTURER
we see a group of men grouped around a control panel we see a man sitting in the captains Chair this is
Lieutenant Ron Carter
CARTER
I?m bringing her down now
to inspect your work
EXT SUB
The sub lowers alongside the hull of the Britannic
INT SUB
CREW MAN
looks great from here
CARTER
Yeah looks excellent you
underwater welders know how to patch something up
CREW MAN
yeah
EXT SUB
We se the Deep Quest float by the Deep adventurer
INT DEEP QUEST
Jessica, Wilding , doctor Kennedy and Baker sit near the veiwports
KENNEDY
there are no gaps
that I see
BAKER
good that means we wont have to use the scrap steel
KENNEDY
we?ll need a little paint wont we
I mean wouldn?t painting the patch make it look nice and pretty for the press?
JESSICA
yeah I?ll see if we can do that
KENNEDY
good
EXT SUBS
The Deep Adventurer is underneath the deep Quest
INT DEEP Adventurer
we see the crew doing what they?re usually supposed to do flicking switches and reading gauges
Lieutenant carter is crouched by the control panel
CU :
a Joint between two pipes leading to the pressure hull begin to leak
CUT TO EXT SUB
a bunch of bubbles roar out of the submersible as it settles
INT DEEP ADVENTURER
The crew in the submersible are oblivious to the Leak
CU
Lieutenant carter is leaning lazily in his chair as we see the leak in the background we hear someone yell
CREW MAN
lieutenant
we see the man put is finger to the leak carter turns around
CARTER
Jesus
CREW MAN
we?re sinking
EXT SUB
The submersible Begins sinking closer to the bottom
INT SUB
Lieutenant carter begins talking on the radiophone
LEUTENENT CARTER
this is the Deep adventurer we have
AN EMERGENCY
JESSICA (V.0)
this sis deep quest what is your status
CARTER
we?re flooding
JESSICA (V.O)
I read you
can you surface
CARTER
No
CUT TO EXT
The deep adventure sinks hit?s the bottom and IMPLODES
INT DEEP QUEST
Jessica and the crew stare at the fallings fragments of the sub
KENNEDY
Jesus
WILDING
I don?t understand that sub was designed to withstand a depth of fifteen thousand feet and we?re only at three hundred and twelve feet
JESSICA
we?ve got sabotage
WILDING
sabotage, most likely not maybe it was just a freak accident
JESSICA
Accident?
WILDING
yes an accident unpredictable event that could have been avoided due to preparation or closer inspection
INT US NAVAL TESTING BASIN DAY:
We pan over the catwalks that bridge the tank the green water underneath is still as can be
INT TANK
we see a Ghost white Britannic Model being Bounced around in the tank we see a submersible model being dropped to the bottom it bounces off the bottom of the tank
INT OBSERVATION ROOM
Jessica is standing in front of a television monitor she looks angry she The Instruments and Machines in the background Crackle and hum and beep she turns around when she HEARS the Door open and close KENNEDY, ANNA ADMIRAL JOHNSON AND BAKER Are standing there, Jessica folds her arms
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I?m sorry for the complication ?.
JESSICA
Your sorry for the complication
I have four men dead already
and you guys are playing with models and
charts
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I?m trying to say that the pressure inside the sub
was higher than normal is all I?m saying it could have been an accidental over pressurization
which lead to a hull failure
JESSICA
I know what happened someone over pressurized
the hull intentionally it was sabotage
ANNA
It wasn?t Sabotage it was an accident
an unpredictable event
Jessica steps up to Anna
JESSICA
you know this wasn?t an accident
don?t you this can never happen
BAKER
don?t assume until you know for a fact what happened
Jessica storms out of he office Anna chases her
KENNEDY
Damn it
EXT Washington DC Day PARK
We see Andy crouched in the bushes with a microphone receiver and a telescope
CUT TO
we see two men talking to each other we don?t hear what theyre saying then we do
MAN 1
tomorrow we?ll have our agent start her first assignment
she?s gotten aquainted with the national underwater marine agency
staff so it wont be so hard for her to start this mission
MAN 2
excellent I hope that she gets us the schematics
and the information from the department of defence
And is still in the bushes as the man leave he puts the eqipment in his breifcase and goes on about his business he keeps on walking he looks back at the men as they walk away we use MUSIC to the Effect
INT JESSICA?s OFFICE NUMA HEADQUARTERS DAY
Jessica is stiing at her desk with a photo album in her lap these are pictures of her with danica
and things from her past thinks that she should forget and never forget
The door opens and Danica comes in looking prettier than we?ve seen her
JESSICA
hey
DANICA
sorry I?m late
JESSICA
I don?t care weather your late or not
I?ve been waiting for this all day
Jessica puts the scrap book down and Danica moves closer to the desk Jessica gets up and walks to her
CUT TO
Jessica pulls Danica close and puts her hand on her shoulder and kisses her softly
they kiss again only thin a little more forcefully Danica backs away Jessica pulls her close again and kisses her ears softly
DANICA
I cant
JESSICA
it?s ok just let it go
Jessica kisses danica on the lips forcefully they both do the same Jessica begins to pull open Danica?s collar
CUT TO
We see Jessica and anna from the shouldr up ,Bare shoulders kissing danica leans her head back as Jessica
kisses her underneath her neck we see bare arms Danica a is stroking Jessica?s shoulder we
JESSICA
was that ok
DANICA
IT was perfect
if you could say that
the door in the office opens and it s Haley morgan
HALEY
Jessica?
JESSICA
its not what you think
HALEY
it is what I think
your with her again aren?t you
JESSICA
Don?t tell anna about me and her
Jessica holds danica close
haley morgan storms out of the office not before throwing an envelope on the floor
EXT RESTERAUNT DAY
Anna is sitting down with andy
ANDY
I thought you didn?t like me much
ANNA
your not that bad of a guy
it?s that you dated friend and you went a little too far to fast
and I don?t want to happen to me
ANDY
I didn?t want to go fast she did
ANNA
I cant do this
ANDY
you can After I tell you something
, II recently visited the Agency and my director said there was
an enemy agent in your agency And she?s supposed to have started
taking some confedential files to the Iraqi government
ANNA
Michelle
ANDY
yes but don?t tell anyone else, We also have found that she has been brainwashed by the head of global com medical electronics company doctor Rolland Emerson
ANNA
I noticed there was something in her eyes that was kind of creepy but I thought It was just me
INT NUMA HEADQUARTERS JESSICA?S OFFICE
We see Michelle downloading files onto a personal hard drive
And then she begins copy files from file folders on a photocopier
EXT iffice
Jessica walks b her office
INT office
Michelle begins to Hack into the department the defense?s network and begins downloading encrypted files
EXT office
we see Jessica walking up the hallway again she passes the door
INT OFFICE
we see the downloading message on the screen it has completed
INT OFFICE
Michelle puts all her stuff into a black bag and leaves the office
EXT STREET DAY
Michelle walks the streets we see Koresh standing on the corner
Michelle gives him the documents and the hard rive
KORESH
are they on there?
MICHELLE
yes theyre on there
KORESH
your going to help bring down America?s most ambitious project
with this one little device
MICHELLE
will I have to see the doctor again
KORESH
tomorrow
Koresh walks off we SEE Michelle?s eyes they are unseeing fixed on koresh
we focus on Andy?s face as Michelle walks off
INT ADMIRAL JOHNSON?s office Day
admiral clancy and admiral Johnson are talking in the office
CLANCY
can we leak some of the information to the Iraqi?s
so maybe we can gain leverage on each of our sides
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I cant risk that if you sent it to them
they?ll end up building one and we don?t want that
we don?t want Iraq to have this kind of weopon
CLANCY
if we just give out bits and pieces
we?ll be fine
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I don?t like the Idea of it and that?s final
CLANCY
lets talk this over
ADMIRAL JOHNSON
I don?t want to I don?t want to hear it
I want you to get out of my office
now admiral not five minutes from now right now
CLANCY
we have to do this to ease down the tension
ADMIRAL JOHSON
get out now
INT NUMA HEADQUARTERS DAY
EXT NUMA HEADQUARTERS NIGHT
we see party banners
one banner reads SECOND ANNEVERSERRY OF SERVICE
JESSICA RIDE
Anna is sitting at the bar all alone wearing a geogious dress We see michelle at the other side of the room
POV.
Michelle watches anna tun around to see her michelle runs up to her
OVER THE SHOULDER ;MICHELLE
MICHELLE
what?s wrong
ANNA
he didn?t show up
MICHELLE
I thout you didn?t like him
ANNA
I do like him as a feind
MICHELLE
that?s what Jessica said about Danica
ANNA
she?s back with her?
MICHELLE
of course Haley saw them in the office together
close, together
ANNA
what should I do
MICHELLE
find someone else
ANNA
I cant
MICHELLE
sure you can your attractive a lot of guys
would love to date you and you?ll be just
as good off as if you were dating a girl
which is weird for someone who is not gay
ANNA
of course I?m not gay we just clicked when we met that?s all
Michelle glaces at her watch and then back at Anna
MICHELLE
I see that you two click pretty easy but you need a change you?re a virgin
for gods sake you?ve never been with a guy
ANNA
I?ve dated guys before I met her but the relationships never got far
MICHELLE
be brave and find someone elese
ANNA
unless I date haley morgan
MICHELLE
eeeww
CUT TO
Jessica talks with Danica on the dance floor
DANICA
I love you
JESSICA
I love you too,Danica
DANICA
do you think I?m better than Anna
JESSICA
a little but I havent been with you in such a long time
you make me want to release every time I see you
DANICA
I guess Anna?s getting old
to you
JESSICA
no but I like the feeling when your with me
Jessica kisses Danica and they begin to slow dance to the Music
We see Anna Staring at them in the background
CUT TO BAR
ANNA
they look great together
MICHELLE
I know but she should be with you
not her yor there for her Anna
and you need to tell her
ANNA
I will tell her
MICHELLE
I?ll be back
I?ve got to go to the restroom
Michelle Leaves the Bar and bypasses the dance floor and goes into the elevator instead
we pan to see Andy watching her
INT HALLWAY NIGHT
Michelle walks down the empty corridor
CUT TO : Darkened office Night
Michelle removes a flash drive from her purse and begins to copy files onto the flash drive From the computer
CUT TO
Anna walks by Jessica?s office
CU TO
Michelle crawls across he office floor holding a group of papers
CUT TO
Anna walks into the bathroom
CUT TO
Michelle begins to copy the PAPERS
CUT TO
Anna walks down the hall
CUT TO
Michelle puts the papers and the flash drive into a tube and slides it into a leather case , she slings the strap across her shoulder and opens the door as Anna comes by
ANNA
what?s in the case
Michelle says nothing ,but she pulls a gun from her purse And she runs Anna peruses her
and pulls out a cell phone and she begins dialing the number for the CIA
EXT PENNSLYVANIA AVE. NIGHT
Anna chases Michelle down the sidewalk and into the street still holding the cell phone . Michelle runs into the grass Anna Jumps on Her Michelle Gets back up and fires into the air and falls down again she gets up holding the gun. A bunch of Men in black suits with Guns spring from nowhere when FLOODLIGHTS suddenly POP on
CIA AGENTS
FREEZE
Andy steps away from a black SUV he holsters his gun and rips the gun out of Michelle?s hand and throws it away he pulls out a needle and jabs it into Michelle?s thigh Michelle collapses
ANDY
Looks like good intelligence pays off
The CIA AGENTS rush in and pick Michelle up and put her into the Black SUV.
ANNA
you can say that again
ANDY
you don?t look too good
ANNA
I?m worried about what?s going to happen to her
ANDY
nothing too bad I presume
CUT TO INT JESSICA?S office Day
Jessica sits facing the window as ANDY ENTERS the ROOM
ANDY
I?m sorry Jessica
I cant help it that Michelle was a spy
JESSICA
leave me alone
ANDY
talk to me
no one is to blame but the guy who brainwashed her don?t blame me
JESSICA
I?ll blame whoever I want to blame
ANDY
you do that but don?t blame me .
INT CIA HEADQUARTERS CIA DIRECTOR?S OFFICE
Jessica is speaking with the director
CIA DIRECTOR
we found appalling levels of mind altering drugs in her system mostly
Amphetamine?s
JESSICA
so her mind was altered
but she seems so normal
CIA DIRECTOR
of course they programmed her to do
certain things but be herself
JESSICA
can you deprogram her
CIA DIRECTOR
not until we fry the chip we found
in her brain
JESSICA
what about the drugs
CIA DIRECTOR
that?s going to take time
JESSICA
what?s going to happen to her when the conspirators
are dead?
CIA DIRECTOR
she goes home and if you do this for me you?ll get her back early
JESSICA
what
CIA DIRECTOR
eliminate Doctor Emerson
EXT EMERSON ELECTRONIC?S BUILING DAY
we focus on the Huge building
INT BUILDING DAY
Anna and Jessica run through the corridors holding guns
Men in JUMPSUITS Start chasing them they start shooting at them Anna shoots one in the leg and he falls we see them run with the guns into another corridor they repeat this process of killing off men in jumpsuits as the men start shooting at them
Doctor George Emerson And Hussein Are Talking in the Office
HEUSEIN
I see the Americans found out
they?ve Abducted and deprogrammed our agent
EMERSON
Abducted , you?re the one that abducted her
it wasn?t worth it she was too young and Naive
for these tasks
HEUSEIN
she was an agent
not our citizen but a way to bring down this project
EMERSON
you have no use for it tell your government that
you don?t even have the Technology to
Even start a project of your own .
Dr. Emerson?s son comes in
ROLLAND EMERSON
what are you guys talking about
what project are you two talking about I can her you two guys bickering about
agents in the hallway and I want to know what you guys are talking about and if it j jeopardizes US security I need to knot I?ve reads all you documents dad I know what your doing
and I don?t like it
EMERSON
get out I don?t want to hear your mouth get out
CUT TO we see Anna and Jessica with Guns in the hallway
Anna and Jessica storm into the office
JESSICA
Don?t Move
EMMERSON
I wont but Mr. Hussein Will
Hussein gets up and plows into the girls sending them flying as he storms out with Emerson Emerson?s son Helps the girls up when they leave
EMERSON
Are you ok
JESSICA
sure
ANNA
who?s this
EMERSON
I?ll tell you two Later Just go and stop them
CU TO EXT BUILDING ROOF
A HELECOPTER is on the Roof Hussein and Emerson are running towards the copter
HEUSSIEN
hurry before they come
Ann and Jessica Along with Rolland come running out of the building onto the Helipad
Hussein shoots at them and they scatter like roaches Rolland goes back inside the building
a man with a gun gets out of the chopper
Jessica runs toward the man and they begin fighting
Anna Runs toward the chopper and Hops in And punches Emerson in the Jaw Emerson smacks her
Anna takes it like a Man and tries to pull him out of the seat as the choppers rotors start to spin
CUT TO
Anna And the guy are still fighting the knocks him down ad runs to the chopper to save Anna
Jessica Approaches the chopper to get Anna She Grabs Anna But Emerson Hold
All work and No Play makes Jack a dull boy
You might get more response if you found a way to get it to display in proper format. It's difficult to read things that don't display right, especially when they are this long. I would suggest posting a file somewhere for folks to read offline.
I didn't finish, don't have the time, but I have three comments right away. (1) You don't provide any location information beyond the heading. It helps the reader (and the production in general) if you provide details of each room instead of just INT - BAR. (2) The girl is 15 and works for a government agency? Seems a bit young. (3) "Britannic sinks lower by the head". Since the head on a ship is the bathroom this makes no sense. I think you mean the bow.
The start is a grabber though, no doubt about that.
RJSchwarz
San Diego, CA
RJSchwarz
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Originally posted by Raymond Leggs
the older man is Admiral Johnson retired admiral of the US Navy and NUMA
How do we know he's a retired admiral?
We come spinning out of nothingness, scattering stars like dust.
I know a lot of new screenwriters think format isn't as important as content. But if you want a serious critique of you script the first thing you should do is present it in proper format.
Sluglines or Scene Headers.
Written in capitals and containing three pieces of information: (1) Where; (2) Exactly where, and (3) when. (2) and (3) are separated by a space, a dash, followed by another space.
(1) can be INT. (interior) or EXT. (exterior); (2) is a short identification of the place; and (3) can be either DAY or NIGHT.
For example:
INT. DENISE?S PLACE - DAY
You can use more than one subject.
For example:
EXT. DENISE?S PLACE - TERRACE - DAY
or:
EXT. DENISE?S PLACE/TERRACE - DAY
You need a new slugline each time you change the place, and/or change the time.
Action, or Description
The screenplay?s visual elements, where we show what is taking place on the screen. Character descriptions, what they are doing, the places, and everything the audience will need to assimilate visually. And nothing else!
Try to create the experience of watching each scene, using only the information available to the movie-goer, in the order that he or she will be presented with it.
Show. Don't tell.
No need to write "we see" or "we hear". For example, the reader knows that "we" will see the smoke and people running if you write
quote:
EXT. BRITANNIC/DECK - DAY
Smoke and the scream of Klaxon horns fill the air. People run in panic.
and that we will see the ragged man if you write:
quote:
INT. D-DECK CORRIDOR - DAY
The ragged looking man put a gun to the head of Ensign Johnson
Don't tell us things we cannot know. As amir pointed out.
One of the reasons it's a bad idea to capitalize sounds is because so many new screenwriters do it wrong. You write "we HEAR WOOD Crunching METAL". If you feel it's essential to capitalize sounds the "WOOD" and "METAL" aren't the sounds. "crunching" is.
But just don't do it - even if you've seen it in other scripts.
Don't "direct" the movie in your script. Your job as the writer is to tell the story, NOT to set up shots.
One final note: I'm sure you think that proper spelling, grammar and punctuation isn't really important on a message boards - after all, you'll fix all that before you show it to an agent or producer - but it makes reading your script difficult. If you want us (your fellow writers) to take the time to critique and offer advice and opinions, you could take the time to present it to us spell checked and with proper punctuation.
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The aim of an argument or discussion should not be victory, but progress.
Joseph Joubert, essayist (1754-1824)
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The aim of an argument or discussion should not be victory, but progress.
Joseph Joubert, essayist (1754-1824)
I can tell you're kind of a young writer arent you? You know why I can tell? It's not the way you structure your story, it's the fact that you have a 17-19 year old CIA agent and a 17-19 year old underwater marine technician. 17-19 year olds are usually finishing high school, not training to become a CIA agent. Look into the specifics of your story a little further.
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This film cost $31 million. With that kind of money I could have invaded some country.
? Clint Eastwood
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This film cost $31 million. With that kind of money I could have invaded some country.
? Clint Eastwood