this is my script any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. the dialogue is a little shacky but im working on it.

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EXT. BRIDGE BATTLE - SUN SET- BRIDGE
CAMERA zoom fast to the bridge and silhouette of two men fighting with the sun in the background. See one of the men do a back flip. The other throws a cross at him.
(A) ECU of Vel?s eyes the right one is glass, and he is smiling.
FADE TO BLACK.
CREDITS BLACK BACKGROUND WHITE LETTERS
FADE TO BLACK.
FADE IN:
INT. VEL?S ROOM
Vel is in his late teens to early twenties handsome, kind of punkish with pictures of punk bands on his wall. Very messy room clothes and bottles all over the floor.
See Vel breath because of the cold air.
(A) ECU of Vel?s eyes they are both real.
See him get up out of bed and walk to the bathroom.
INT. VEL?S BATHROOM
Vel turns on the hot water of the bath.
FLASH BACK:
EXT. ALLEY
See woman screaming with fire in the background
CUT TO:
INT. BATHROOM
Vel turning on the cold water for the bath.
FLASH BACK:
EXT. ALLEY
See hand with a knife in it coming down.
CUT TO:
INT. BATHROOM
Vel is in the bath and steam is mounting on the mirror. Slowly CAMERA zooms on the left side on the mirror to see an outline of something forming. It turns out to be a figure of Vel?s little sister who died when they were 11, PENELOPE. Vel sees this and jumps then shuts his eyes. When Vel opens his eyes its not there anymore.
VEL
What? I?m not awake.
EXT. VEL?S HOUSE
Vel is walking outside and he starts to smell something. He starts looking around to see what it is. He sees a dead squirrel and picks it up and throws it away.
INT VEL?S CAR
See Vel pull out car keys and start to get in the car. CAMERA is on the side view of the car. See Vel getting into the car. Slow Motion He roles down the window to spit and in the background see Vel?s girlfriend, MARIA, with her throat cut. Vel turns his face towards MARIA. MARIA says very slowly with her hand pointing to the driver windshield.
MARIA
Help me!
Vel looks towards the driver window in shock and sees the same outline of PENELOPE but in MARIA?s blood. Vel looks back to see that the car is spotless and there is neither an outline of PENELOPE nor MARIA being dead. See Vel take two pills of some sort. See the car back out of the driveway and leave the house.
EXT. INTERSTATE
Overhead shot of Vel?s car going down the Interstate. Zoom on his car. He is head banging to AFI in the background. CAMERA starts to shake and hear a random screaming.
FLASH BACK:
EXT. ALLEY
Same woman as before screaming with two children in her hands. One is a boy the other is a girl about the same age.
CUT TO:
INT. VEL?S CAR
Vel turns off the radio and there is silence. After three seconds of silence a faint whistle starts up. It builds up and stops.
VEL
I got to go to a doctor.
Vel grabs his phone and dials his office number. The other side is picks up and Vel can only hears static at first.
BOSS
(Gurgle spit caught blah) Hello
VEL
Boss I'm not gonna be able..
Boss throws up on the other line.
VEL
Boss, are you OK? Boss?
BOSS
AAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!
VEL
Shit! Boss I'll be right over.
EXT. OFFICE BUILDING
Vel?s car pulls up in front of the building. See shooting script for details.
INT. OFFICE BUILDING
Vel runs through the lobby and waits for the elevator (see shooting Script). He gets out on the 13th floor. He walks out and stands in front of a door that says BOARDROOM in bold letters. He opens the knob and walks in.
INT. OFFICE BOARDROOM
Vel seems to be the only one in the room.
VEL
Boss?
BOSS
(Gurgle)
VEL
Boss are you OK? Where are you?
All of a sudden the boss jumps out for behind the desk at the other end of the room. He is obviously neither alive nor dead. The boss is overweight, in his 50?s his suit, and is bloody and ripped. Vel turns on the lights and there is blood everywhere in the room (chunky style). The boss?s face is halfway ripped off. The boss starts to run at Vel.
VEL
Boss? What are you doing? Stop it!
The boss is attacking Vel and clawing at him The boss throws Vel onto the floor and jumps on top of him. Vel manages to kick a chair leg off and beats the boss off of him. Vel becomes oddly vicious and wails on the zombie boss with all of his might. Vel?s right eye is glass. He gets up and wipes off dome blood. He realizes what he has done.
VEL
Oh, shit.
(A) OVERHEAD SHOT OF VEL RUNNING OUT WITH BLOOD EVERYWHERE
Vel runs out of the room.
INT. OFFICE BUILDING
Vel is running down the hallway with no blood prints from his shoes behind him. He runs into the bathroom to clean up.
INT. OFFICE BATHROOM
(A) OVERHEAD SHOT OF VEL WASHING HIS HANDS
Vel runs in the bathroom to wash his hands. When he is finished he takes off his collared shirt and he has a misfits shirt on underneath. He runs out and gets in the elevator and goes out to the lobby.
INT. OFFICE LOBBY
Vel starts to walk out of the revolving door but when he puts his hand on the glass his hand still clean, leaves a bloody handprint on the glass. He runs out the side door instead.
EXT. OFFICE BUILDING
Vel starts looking for someone to help him. He only sees a little girl to his right. The little girl is in a dirty flower print dress and has knotted hair.
VEL
Hey! Wait.
Vel starts to run towards her. She doesn?t move.
(A) SHOT OF GIRL?S EYE WITH VEL RUNNING UP TO HER BEHIND
VEL
(while running) Hey! My friend he he was in in a terrible accident!
When Vel gets to the girl, before he can react to the fact she is a zombie, she wipes around and quickly snags his arm and tries to bite a chunk out of it. He manages to push her off and kicks her kneecaps in and stomps her head into the ground. Vel looks distraught.
VEL
What the hell is going on!?!
Vel starts to speed walk away from the scene of the beating. He reaches into his pocket for his pills . The he is out of pills and drops the bottle. CAMERA zooms quickly on the pill bottle
BOTTLE
For Schizophrenia Only.
Vel gets into his car and drives off.
EXT. FLOWER SHOP
Vel drives by his girlfriend?s work place, ?Chris?s Flower Shop.? He sees some activity in the store. He looks around the store and goes to the dumpster and pulls out a vodka bottle, breaks it and proceeds inside.
INT. FLOWER SHOP
(A) OVERHEAD SHOT OF VEL WALKING IN DEAD PEOPLE WITH WHITE ROSES EVERYWHERE AND BLOOD
Vel walks into the flower shop to be appalled by the carnage that has happened. There are bodies everywhere in the shop with white roses all over the floor.
VEL
If any person alive is in here, please yell for help!
Vel hears a voice in the back of the shop. He runs to find out what it is.
INT. FLOWER SHOP COOLER
Maria, Vel?s girlfriend, is stuck under a shelf and can see her breath because of the coldness in the cooler. He runs to help her.
VEL
Maria, are you ok? What happened.
MARIA
Help me. I think my leg is broken.
VEL
Hold on. Let me get this off of you.
Vel picks her up and carries her to his car.
(A) VEL WITH BLOODY GIRLFRIEND THEN QUICKLY W/O GIRLFRIEND THEN WITH GIRLFRIEND
INT. VEL?S CAR
Vel puts Maria into the passenger side blood is everywhere. He looks into his rear view mirror and sees his sister siting there watching him. He shuts hes eyes fast. When he opens them she is gone.
VEL
This has been a crazy day. I wake up and see an outline of my dead 11 year old sister on my mirror. Then is see you .. Never mind about that part.
MARIA
I didn't know you had a sister.
VEL
Yeah she died when i was 11 the same time my mom died in the mugging.
MARIA
I?m sorry to hear that. I had no idea.
VEL
I tried to keep it a secret.
MARIA
Hurry!
VEL
We?re almost there.
EXT. INTERSTATE
Vel?s car zooming past a sign that says hospital.
EXT. HOSTPITAL
Vel arrives at the hospital.
VEL
You stay here. I?ll be right back.
MARIA
Okay.
INT. HOSTPITAL
The hospital is strangely abandoned not a soul in sight. He runs straight to the pharmacy and looks in the pill cabinet and cannot find his pills.
VEL
Shit!
Vel looks around and he rips off the cabinet door and carries it out to the car.
INT. VEL?S CAR
Maria is not in the car anymore. The car is spotless no blood at all in it.
FLASH BACK:
EXT. OLD PLANTATION HOUSE
Young Vel and his sister are playing running throughout the fields. See Vel?s mother, the same woman in the other flashbacks talking to one of her friends over tea.
PENELOPE
Come play with me, Vel.
VEL?S MOTHER
Vel always wanted a sister. He made up a little imaginary friend to cope with the miscarriage i had around his age.
CUT TO:
INT. VEL?S CAR
Vel gets into the car and speeds off away from the abandoned hospital
EXT. POLICE STATION
Vel runs into the building.
INT. POLICE STATION
Vel freaks out at the desk.
VEL
YOU HAVE TO HELP ME! MY GIRLFRIEND! SHE?S DEAD! MY BOSS TOO! HE ATTACKED ME I DIDN?T KNOW WHAT TO DO..
OFFICER 1
Calm down son! Calm down. Now I'll need some id before we start.
VEL
Oh Okay here.
Vel takes out his wallet and his pills fall to the ground. The officer picks it up and holds onto them. He grabs the pills without Vel noticing. The officer leads his to a interrogation room.
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM
OFFICER 1
Sit tight for just a second son.
The officer leaves Vel by himself in the room
CUT TO:
INT. POLICE STATION LOBBY
Policeman on the phone.
OFFICER 1
Uh-huh. Yes, I see. Okay. Thank you very much. (click)
Gets another officer and walks into the interrogation room.
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM
Vel is sitting by himself with a light silhouetting his face against the wall. Both officers walk in.
OFFICER 1
Vel, this is Detective White.
VEL
HI.
OFFICER 1
Well, I'll leave you two together.
Officer 1 leaves the room. Now it is just Vel and White face to face.
WHITE
Well Vel, we called your boss?s office, and he didn?t check into work today.
VEL
(getting frustrated) What? What are you talking about? He was there! There was blood everywhere! He attacked me!
WHITE
We also called ?Maria? at the flower shop. There is no Maria working there.
White throws his keys on the table and Vel freaks out. White starts to walk out.
WHITE
Oh yeah, the hospital you told us about has been abandoned for years.
White walks out of the room. Vel gets up and walks around to cool off. He ends up going to the one sided mirror in the room and looks into it. While he is looking in the mirror he sees his sister in the corner playing with dolls. She is covered in blood. Vel starts to see blood dripping from the tops of the walls. It starts slow and builds up to a pour. The blood is only in the corner that his sister is sitting in. Vel starts to freak out because he just realized that there is no Maria, hospital, or boss. Vel sits in the opposite corner of where his sister is and starts to cry and shake. The door suddenly burst open and two medical personnel come into the room to strap him up. Vel gets away from them and runs out of the police station.
EXT. POLICE STATION
Vel runs our screaming and the medical personnel follow him.
EXT. CITY
Vel is running and hears church bells. He sees the church and runs into it.
INT. CHURCH
Vel looks out the door and sees the Medical Personnel run past confused. He turns around and starts to walk though the giant double doors into the church. He notices that the holy water in front of the doors is filled with blood and has a used condom hanging out of it. He looks down and sees blood trails of someone being dragged into the church. He walks into the double doors.
INT. CHURCH ALTER ROOM
Vel walks in to see a giant cross in front of the alter burning with a priest burning on it laughing hysterically. Vel looks down to see that the blood trail leads to a life size statue of Jesus sitting in the front row of the church. The Jesus is laughing at the priest.
VEL
Jesus Chr-! (realizes where he is) Are you okay?
Vel runs to the cross and helps the burning priest down. He pats out the flames and turns out the priest is a zombie also. The priest is very crispy from the burning and he attacks Vel. The priest bites a chunk out of Vel?s hand and Vel flips out on the priest. Bashing his head in with his foot. Vel grabs a candle holder and breaks it. Vel starts sawing his hand off so he won?t turn into a zombie. He then wraps the priests scarf over the wound and uses the crucifix from the Mary statue as a weapon against the priest. He shoves it through the priests stomach. Then uses the broken candle holder to shove it into the priest?s neck and kicks his head off. Vel is still pissed off and he walks outside the church.
EXT. CHURCH
Vel starts to walk towards the corner and he starts to see things on the ground. As he gets closer he sees that it is dead doves in a line around the corner. He follows them to his sister standing in the middle of the sidewalk.
PENELOPE
Come play with me, Vel.
VEL
You?re dead! You died when i was eleven!
PENELOPE
What are you talking about? I never existed! HAHAHAHA!
Vel hears this and freaks out on her. He becomes out of control. Penelope is acting very innocent like she cannot do anything. CAMERA sees Vel attacking nothing with no blood (fight club style). Vel has no crucifix. A man comes over and sees him doing this.
MAN
Hey, man chill out! Hey CALM DOWN!
Vel turns around and starts to wail on MAN.
CUT TO:
EXT. BRIDGE BATTLE
Same fight scene as first scene. Then the scene goes black.
CUT TO:
INT. VEL?S ROOM
Vel is sitting on his bed all the CAMERA can see are his eyes. He gasps for air and his right eye is glass as before.
FADE TO BLACK.

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