Really liked it. The suspense and plot twists were all well done, and there were a lot of very well shot sequences; as you said yourself it's just the production values that need upping. Read some books on cinematography, sound etc etc to get an idea about what you're aiming for. Loved the dog in the scene as well 😀

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you know.. to be COMPLETELY honest with you. I liked it!! I liked the use of music, the shots were done pretty well. Hmm.. I dont know what really else to say, besides congrats. I enjoyed it, and you are the first person to make a short that i sat through and said o sh*t at the end when you realize whats happening. I would be interested to see what you can do with professional grade equipment and lighting and sound.

I might be 18 **(just turned 19 April 4th)**, but watch out, everyone has to start somewhere. I'm just starting a bit faster and bigger. 🙂

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Really liked it. The suspense and plot twists were all well done, and there were a lot of very well shot sequences; as you said yourself it's just the production values that need upping. Read some books on cinematography, sound etc etc to get an idea about what you're aiming for. Loved the dog in the scene as well 😀

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Yeah THANKS ALOT!
I'll be sure to look into some books on cinematography. thnx for da feedback And lol ? the dog.

EAST 1999 thats where you find me slangin that ya-yo

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Originally posted by bryce1yar

you know.. to be COMPLETELY honest with you. I liked it!! I liked the use of music, the shots were done pretty well. Hmm.. I dont know what really else to say, besides congrats. I enjoyed it, and you are the first person to make a short that i sat through and said o sh*t at the end when you realize whats happening. I would be interested to see what you can do with professional grade equipment and lighting and sound.

I might be 18 **(just turned 19 April 4th)**, but watch out, everyone has to start somewhere. I'm just starting a bit faster and bigger. 🙂

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Thanks alot homie. I really appreciate the feedback. Its good to heat. Hopefully Ill be able to get on that professional level one day. And thnx again

EAST 1999 thats where you find me slangin that ya-yo

I liked it, too. You've got a good grasp of the story telling basics and you have the Carpenter and Tarantino shots down. So you now need to experiment with the technical aspect. I don't think you need professional grade equipment - I think you just need to use a few lights. It's easy to just point and shoot when you're using video - you see in on the screen, it must be okay.

Buy a couple of clamp-on lights and a paper lantern or two - learn to use back light to add depth. A couple of examples:

That shot where the guy sits on the couch and picks up the phone: the back ground is fully lit - we can see the ironing board well and even the kitchen, but his face is in the dark. Hang a paper lantern near the camera, expose for his face and the background goes darker - that way the audience is focused on the face of the actor and we can't see what's in the dark behind him.

Was the shot silhouette shot of the guy (in the room with the pool table) intentional? It looked great, but since all your shots are nearly silhouettes it's hard to tell. If your other shots were lit well, that shot would really stand out.

Nice work.

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I liked it. SIMPLE.

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i really liked this, thats the first non-pro movie that actuallt kept me on the edge of me seat!

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Originally posted by certified instigator

I liked it, too. You've got a good grasp of the story telling basics and you have the Carpenter and Tarantino shots down. So you now need to experiment with the technical aspect. I don't think you need professional grade equipment - I think you just need to use a few lights. It's easy to just point and shoot when you're using video - you see in on the screen, it must be okay.

Buy a couple of clamp-on lights and a paper lantern or two - learn to use back light to add depth. A couple of examples:

That shot where the guy sits on the couch and picks up the phone: the back ground is fully lit - we can see the ironing board well and even the kitchen, but his face is in the dark. Hang a paper lantern near the camera, expose for his face and the background goes darker - that way the audience is focused on the face of the actor and we can't see what's in the dark behind him.

Was the shot silhouette shot of the guy (in the room with the pool table) intentional? It looked great, but since all your shots are nearly silhouettes it's hard to tell. If your other shots were lit well, that shot would really stand out.

Nice work.

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The aim of an argument or discussion should not be victory, but progress.
Joseph Joubert, essayist (1754-1824)

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Thanks 4 da info, Everything you said was pretty helpful.
But where can I find a CLAMP on light and a PAPER light. Im guessing they wont be to hard to find. I am also going to begin researching on how to light my films better.

EAST 1999 thats where you find me slangin that ya-yo

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I liked it. SIMPLE.

SUBSCRIBE TO MY VIDEOS!
?url?www.youtube.com/rsteenoven?/url?

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Okay, I will

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i really liked this, thats the first non-pro movie that actuallt kept me on the edge of me seat!

-(Own3d Studios)-

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Thanks I appreciate it!

EAST 1999 thats where you find me slangin that ya-yo

lol ok, you dont have 2, thats just my sig

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Its one of those shorts where I say "its nearly all the way there". Whole thing is overlit for the most part considering the subject matter. Pity it didn't have an original soundtrack and the Halloween mask? Made it a bit pastiche. BUT....

One can't argue with this based on the fact that its easy to see its a zero budget job from aspiring filmmakers. I was touched by it. Its yet more really decent stuff from young budding filmmakers. Editing was tight enough. Framing and matching of shots was a little off, but still an achievement all the same. I don't believe in righting off. Whoever made this should persue the career in film.

Any hardware store will have those clamp on work lights - you might even have a few in your garage right now: http://www.doityourself.com/invt/u239921

Paper lanterns can be purchased at most home improvement stores - check out the garden area - at Ikea and at national companies like Lamps Plus.
http://www.cherryblossomgardens.com/paper_lanterns.asp

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Originally posted by hethwheel

Its one of those shorts where I say "its nearly all the way there". Whole thing is overlit for the most part considering the subject matter. Pity it didn't have an original soundtrack and the Halloween mask? Made it a bit pastiche. BUT....

One can't argue with this based on the fact that its easy to see its a zero budget job from aspiring filmmakers. I was touched by it. Its yet more really decent stuff from young budding filmmakers. Editing was tight enough. Framing and matching of shots was a little off, but still an achievement all the same. I don't believe in righting off. Whoever made this should persue the career in film.

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Thanks for your response. I see I have some things to work on. Including lighting and making my own music. I really appreciate the feedback.

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Originally posted by certified instigator

Any hardware store will have those clamp on work lights - you might even have a few in your garage right now: http://www.doityourself.com/invt/u239921

Paper lanterns can be purchased at most home improvement stores - check out the garden area - at Ikea and at national companies like Lamps Plus.
http://www.cherryblossomgardens.com/paper_lanterns.asp

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cool, I'm definitely gonna get some of these. Thanks for da info

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