Now you have two threads asking about the same movie. Which thread would you like people to comment on? I will delete the one you don't need and comment on the one you want to keep.

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The aim of an argument or discussion should not be victory, but progress.
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I just wanted a comment but i am guessing my film is poor, you can delete all the threads

No need to delete all of them - we just didn't need two seperate threads for the same movie. Why are you guessing your movie is poor?

... its kind of poor.
this could be compressed into like, one minute.

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Thanks, No-one seems to post any criticism but i need it because it's worse not to know.

Well I have two thoughts. (1) Lots of people may view the site from work and are unable to view the video. Other people may have hard tests or a lot of work to do. There are millions of reasons why people have not responded that have nothing to do with the quality of the video. (2) You seem to give up easily. You will need to fight for lots of things if you ever go into filmmaking. Even if everyone bagged on your movie take the criticism as a way to learn and get better.

Don't give up. At least not easily.

RJSchwarz
San Diego, CA

Mic, you didn't even give people time. This forum is really slow on weekends. You posted your first thread on Sunday and this one less than 24 hours later. Have a little patience. People don't always check the threads several times a day.

Your movie looks nice but it's really slow and not very engaging. You've got over 40 seconds of a shot of a computer screen - right at the beginning. That put me off right away. I understand this is "Part 1" and I'm sure that things will take off in the second part, but currently it doesn't make me want to see the rest. Long shots of a guy sitting at a computer screen with voice over followed by a long travel sequence (waiting for the train, the train approaching, getting on the train, shots from the train, shots of the train) really got dull for me.

I liked your use of close-ups and the voice over was fine. Pick up the pace. If the point of your story is the journey then something should happen - otherwise get to your point sooner.

This reminded me of why I hate youtube so much. yuckyuckyuck

I completly agree with instigator, very very dull and drawn out. I kept expecting something apocolyptic and life changing to happen but it never did.

That's it! You people have stood in my way long enough! I'm going to clown college!

Thanks?:D? It does help with your replies and i will take on board everything and take the close ups idea with me in other films. What my voice sounds like to me in my head is completly different to what is on tape so i'm not really into my voice so i will get someone else next time. My friend does tae kwondo so i may do something with him on that theme but i mean it would take a year to make because i know things like that need creativity.

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Originally posted by Mic

What my voice sounds like to me in my head is completly different to what is on tape so i'm not really into my voice so i will get someone else next time.

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Maybe you should run that by me again because I thought I got it then it was like...blahblahWHAT!?!?!!

So what were you trying to say?

That's it! You people have stood in my way long enough! I'm going to clown college!

lol what i mean to say is literal. My voice sounds deeper when i speak but when i listen to it on a tape it sounds like miss piggy?:)?

I totally know what you mean, I think I sound rather suave, but I actually sound like a monotone squealing chain smoker, which I am...but still. Its ridiculous isn't it?

That's it! You people have stood in my way long enough! I'm going to clown college!

Haha, worst thing is, you say to yourself 'yeah but that's the mic', and it isn't. You actually sound like that. 🙁

Ach such is life, such is life

That's it! You people have stood in my way long enough! I'm going to clown college!