First of all, great work, I can see some potential within your directing strategies. But there are things you need to be aware of when diving into your next project so you can improve on it. These are all my opinions, it is up to you to take them to heart.

The main flaw with this film that I noticed was that you used way to many canted (or dutch) angles. Almost every shot presented was some kind of canted angle. When using angles such as this, it's main objective is to signify that something is suddenly not quite right. The key word being "suddenly." Now from the beginning, I was able to tell from your plot synopsis that your film dealt with something supernatural, so I can see the logic you were using when you decided to use that type of camera work. Although, when you overuse a shot that much, it takes away from that shot's ability to be used in an effective manner. For instance, most of the beginning where the man is sitting at the table counting the money and becoming distressed could have been without the canted angle. The first time that I think it could have been used to it's full potential was at time: (3:13) directly after he hears the supernatural voice and stares down the hallway. That shot (which is beautiful btw), had it been the first used canted angle would have brought a great deal of suspense and wonder to what was going on, but since that type of shot had been used so excessively, it no longer seemed as effective for your film.

Another flaw that I noticed off the bat was that you broke the essential 180 degree rule. This is immediately broken at time: (2:55), where you moved over the line without any logical shot to bridge over that line such as a dolly shot. Be sure to be aware of this when directing a scene because when this rule is broken without any kind of thematical reason, most producers viewing your work will turn it away. Here's something explaining what the 180 degree rule is...

http://www.studentfilmmakersguild.com/public/261.cfm

Now there are other things that I can add to this analysis but they all fall within the same realm. So I will just leave you with this. When setting up your shot, always think to yourself before pressing the record button, "what exactly is this shot being used to accomplish in terms of effectively developing my story?" Now certain shots accomplish certain things, and I am not going to give you a lesson in cinematography, so I will leave you to figure out what kinds of shots effectively develop the emotions your trying to convey in the story.

Overall I did enjoy your film and think that your idea for it is definitely interesting, but there are some obvious things that need to be improved. That improvement can only come with practice, so if you are serious about filmmaking, continue to make as many films as you possibly can, and never give up.

Jerod M. Nawrocki

Producer/Director
http://www.imdb.com/name/nm3749541/