I really liked it. What do you use to edit with, and what font was that you used? I liked that.
The only negative feedback would be; where they are in a field and they are all yelling and then it cuts to them sitting around at a bench. I would personally like that shot just a little bit more if you transitioned it better. I don't mean in post, I like that it's a simple cut. But when they're all yelling, if you had just a quarter second lull, while one of them did something funny, like throw the spear, then it would transition a little better. Maybe just cut the first clip so it ends when he throws the spear. Just my thoughts.