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3rd Teaser For "Terms of Azimuth"

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(@bcameron)
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From the upcoming indie feature, "Terms of Azimuth" being shot in San Diego...comments, questions?

http://vimeo.com/8662064

 
Posted : 11/01/2010 8:30 pm
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Originally posted by bcameron

From the upcoming indie feature, "Terms of Azimuth" being shot in San Diego...comments, questions?

http://vimeo.com/8662064


Ha, I see what you did there with your font choice. ?8D?

haha, I'd suggest to try and make the text look a little bit more "drawn" "worn" or "printed" to disguise it a bit from pure blaring Comic Sans MS. This might be a bit of a personal thing (I usually dislike when I can recognize a font), but if other people don't notice it directly they're bound to, especially with such a popular font, sense an unusual familiarity with it which may put them off.

It would also be nice to hear a bit about the story, or at least some intriguing bits of dialogue. It kind of feels like a commercial for a new episode of an established TV series, where the fans are the target audience and the premise and story are already assumed to be understood. In this case I don't think that is working, at least with no dialog, because it just left me a bit uncertain about what to think.

Take my opinions with a grain of salt though. And I did enjoy it (photography sure looks nice!), I just think there are some things that could be improved on to make it more endearing.

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http://vimeo.com/corax

 
Posted : 11/01/2010 10:02 pm
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